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I read a news that this noon which said that there were still 1400 toronto residents who don’t have power after yesterday’s spring storm.

I heard a similar story last month which a snow storm hit Ontario. It feel a little wide since I have lived in a city for long time. I experienced power outage when I was a child. At that time every family has candles in their home. But in my memory, at least in the last fifteen years I experienced the outage no more than three times.

I know some time the bad weather is unavoidable, but the infrastructure is still important.

chatgpt, 我英语还是很差。我想 practice 我的英语水平。所以从今天开始我会每天 写 100 个单词左右的英语小文章，请你帮我分析下我文章的中的关键字，告诉我的语法错误，以及是不是有其他更好的表达方式。如果能告诉我几个相关的高级词汇，那就最好了。 上面是我今天写的

  1. 原句:

    I read a news that this noon which said that there were still 1400 toronto residents who don’t have power after yesterday’s spring storm.

    修改建议: ✅ “news” 是不可数名词，所以不能加 “a”。 ✅ “this noon” 改为 “at noon today” 更自然。 ✅ “don’t have power” 应该用过去时 “didn’t have power”，因为是“after yesterday’s storm”。 ✅ “Toronto” 应该大写。

    更好的表达:

    I read a news report at noon today, which said that 1,400 Toronto residents still didn’t have power after yesterday’s spring storm.

  1. 原句:

    I heard a similar story last month which a snow storm hit Ontario.

    修改建议: ✅ 这句话缺少连接词：“which” 用得不对，应是“when a snowstorm hit Ontario”。 ✅ “snow storm” 合成一个词 “snowstorm” 更常见。

    更好的表达:

    I heard a similar story last month, when a snowstorm hit Ontario.

  1. 原句:

    It feel a little wide since I have lived in a city for long time.

    修改建议: ✅ “feel” 应改为 “felt”。 ✅ “wide” 这里意思不清晰，应该是想说 “unusual” 或 “strange”。 ✅ “for long time” 应为 “for a long time”。 ✅ 还可以补充“without experiencing this kind of situation”。

    更好的表达:

    It felt a little strange, since I have lived in a city for a long time and haven’t experienced this kind of situation in years.

  1. 原句:

    I experienced power outage when I was a child.

    修改建议: ✅ 应为 “a power outage”。

    更好的表达:

    I experienced a power outage when I was a child.

  1. 原句:

    At that time every family has candles in their home.

    修改建议: ✅ 过去时应该是 “had”。 ✅ “every family” 后通常跟单数形式：“its home” 更严格，但口语中也常用 “their”。

    更好的表达:

    At that time, every family had candles in their home.

  1. 原句:

    But in my memory, at least in the last fifteen years I experienced the outage no more than three times.

    修改建议: ✅ “experienced” 应为现在完成时 “have experienced”。 ✅ “the outage” 应为泛指 “an outage”。 ✅ 结构更清晰些为：“in the past fifteen years”。

    更好的表达:

    But in my memory, I have experienced a power outage no more than three times in the past fifteen years.

  1. 原句:

    I know some time the bad weather is unavoidable, but the infrastructure is still important.

    修改建议: ✅ “some time” 应为 “sometimes”。 ✅ 这句话表达很清楚，但可以稍作润色。

    更好的表达:

    I know that sometimes bad weather is unavoidable, but strong infrastructure is still crucial.

💡 高级词汇推荐（与你的主题相关）：

  1. Resilient – 有韧性的，能承受冲击的 e.g. “We need a more resilient power grid to deal with extreme weather conditions.”
  2. Infrastructure – 基础设施（你已经用了，非常好）
  3. Unprecedented – 前所未有的 e.g. “The snowstorm caused unprecedented damage to the city’s utilities.”
  4. Disruption – 中断、干扰 e.g. “Storms often cause major disruptions to daily life.”
  5. Preparedness – 应对准备 e.g. “Emergency preparedness can reduce the impact of power outages.”

✍️ 你的原文 + 修改建议

  1. 原句:

    It felt unusual to me. ✅ 这句没问题，很自然！

  2. 原句:

    I lived one city in China for 40 years. ❌ 有语法问题，应该是 “in one city”，而且更自然的说法是 “I’ve lived in the same city” 或 “I lived in a city”。

    ✅ 改写:

    I’ve lived in the same city in China for 40 years.

  3. 原句:

    When I was young, I mean at 80s or 90s. ❌ 应该是 “in the 80s or 90s”。“I mean” 可以更自然地表达为补充说明，比如 “That is, during the 80s and 90s.”

    ✅ 改写:

    When I was young — that is, during the 80s and 90s — 或 Back in the 80s and 90s when I was growing up,

  4. 原句:

    We always experienced power outage, so every family in China had candles when there is no electricity. ❌ “power outage” 前需要加 “a”。 ❌ “is” 应该是过去时 “was”。 ✅ 更自然的表达也可以是 “would experience outages regularly” 和 “kept candles at home”。

    ✅ 改写:

    We often experienced power outages, so every family in China kept candles at home for when there was no electricity.

  5. 原句:

    I have to say I experience less than 3 times in the last 20 years. ❌ “experience” 应为过去完成时“have experienced”。 ❌ “less than 3 times” 更自然的表达是 “fewer than three times”。

    ✅ 改写:

    I have to say, I’ve experienced a power outage fewer than three times in the last 20 years.

✅ 更流畅的版本（整合建议）：

It felt unusual to me. I’ve lived in the same city in China for 40 years. Back in the 80s and 90s when I was growing up, we often experienced power outages, so every family kept candles at home in case the electricity went out. I have to say, I’ve experienced a power outage fewer than three times in the last 20 years.

💡 相关高级词汇推荐：

  • Outage – 中断（尤指电力）
  • Intermittent – 间歇性的 e.g. “Intermittent power supply was common in the 80s.”
  • Contingency – 应急预案、应急物品 e.g. “Candles were a common contingency in many households.”
  • Infrastructure reliability – 基础设施的可靠性
  • Urban resilience – 城市的韧性、应对灾害的能力
  1. a news report which said
  2. this noon -> at this noon
  3. when a snowstorm hit the Ontario.
  6. It felt unusual to me. I’ve lived in a city in China for 40 years. Back in the 80s and 90s when I was growing up, we often experienced power outages, so every family kept candles at home in case the electricity went out. I have to say, I’ve experienced a power outage fewer than three times in the last 20 years.
Updated on 2025-04-30
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